hello  easter bunny 

John was excited about the day tommorow as it was easter tomorrow. So that night he went to bed after his supper which was a creamy yogurt, then at about 9 pm at night he woke up. He had heard a thumping noise, he went down the stairs half asleep and saw a fluffy tail sticking out from under the sofa at the wall. He looked behind the couch and there was the easter bunny curled up in a ball lying there afraid to move. So John quietly tried to calm it down by talking to it quietly then it started talking back how funny a rabbit that can talk back to someone then the rabbit said never tell anyone about what you have seen and I will give you more easter eggs next year........

Angela

We were to cotinue a story called Angela to pass our spare time. I continued it a bit like this.....

As we were walking along the beachfront, we looked at the hotel sign a lovely blue title luxury inn which had a lighter blue blob underneath saying 5 star we looked at the window abovethe sign, this window belonged to our room. suddenly we saw a light turn on IN OUR ROOM! We looked up only to see a figure infront of the window. I said "look theres someone in our room."

        "Stop being stupid you have the key" Daniel said.

       "No I gave it to Angela" I said

       " so angela is in our room" I said.

Without another word we climbed up the steps from the beach across the busy road through the hotel doors up the lift and to our surprise we saw Angela running along the corridor then as we looked at the floor we saw our key lying there. I opened the door then i shouted "YUCK

                                                                                           the magic box

It was Sams birthday. Everything he got was great then it came to his last present. He was wanting a dog but there was no way he'd get one now. Then his auntie gave him a present. It was an old box. It felt light.

He put it in the loft. The next day he laid it by the back corner then covered it with an old grey sheet. His mum shouted him down for lunch. After his lunch he went to play with his friend Jason. He had completely forgot about his box.

Weeks later he noticed the snacks from his room kept being taken. He wondered what was taking them. He got more and still they went missing. He was determined to stop whatever it was so he got a bar of chocolate and a tub of ham he put them in a metal floored cage and attatched a sliding door to it, he also atatched a string so when it was pulled the door would close. Suddenly something came through the door and into the cage. He heared a scatter of feet go onto the metal floor so he quickly let go of the string. Whatever it was it was trapped.

He went for a closer look it was a pitch black figure with glowing green eyes. He felt a shiver go up his spine. There was one question.

WHERE HAD IT CAME FROM??????????????????????????

CHAPTER 2

He thought where it had came from, he had no idea. He lifted it up. It was as light as a feather. He felt he had lifted this weight before but where. At last Sam remembered. It had came from that old box. He went up the loft and there it was that old box opened with the sheet at the other side of the loft. He peared into the box and there were all his treats and next to them four miniature versions AND BESIDE THEM ALL HIS SNACKS!!!!!!! Thats why all his snacks were missing. This cat like creature had been taking all his snacks and for a good reason as well. It had been looking for food to feed its young ones.

magic box self evaluation

I quite liked reading my own story

The parts I thought were strong were when I was describing the trap and the cat

The word I particularly think describes my story is exciting because I kept wanting to read on

I liked my setting to be on Sams birthday

I think the storyline was perfect to follow