The Happy Bunny Friends

There once were 4 happy bunny friends called Flopsy, Flippy, Nutty and Cuddles and their job was to be Easter bunnies. Every Easter they go round the houses delivering eggs and Cola to the children. But one easter every thing went wrong. The easter eggs and cola was not there, some bad kids took the eggs and cola away. The friends found a bottle of cola and it was empty... Flippy called the cola king and told him the cola was stolen. Nutty had suddenly dissapeared and there was no sign of him. Nutty was found giving the eggs and cola to the bad kids for money. When they caught him he had to buy the eggs and cola back from the kids. Then marshins landed and they ate the eggs and drank the cola and Easter was spoiled until next year.

When next year came the marshins came back with bigger eggs and lime cola and Easter was saved by marshins. They used a time machine and saved last easter and they lived happly ever after.

The magic box

One rainy day two brothers, john and ray were at their grandad's house and were bored. John was 10 years old with green eyes and brown hair. Ray was 9 years old with blue eyes and black hair. They went to look for something to do so they went to play a board game but their grandad was asleep and all of the games needed three or more players. Instead of playing a board game they went to the attic of the house to explore. In the attic there was lots of stuff from the war because their grandad was in world war 2. They both started playing with a gasmask and John got it stuck on his head but he finally got it off. Suddenly there was a shining, blinding light from the corner of the attic so they went over to it and couldn't see anything but then Ray tripped on a broken floor board and saw a box which could change colour like a chemelion. They picked it up and ran through to their grandad."GRANDAD!," shouted Ray.

"GRANDAD!,"shouted John.

Chapter 2

"What is it?"snapped grandad sleepily,"you've just woken me from my deep slumber"

"Look what we found,"said Ray, holding up the box.

"What?"asked grandad,"this better not be a trick."

The box had changed colour and you couldn't see it anymore.

"Look closer,"said John.

So grandad looked and he saw it."Oh yes, I can see it now. I got that off a man who I saved in the war."said Grandad, "I don't really know what it does or what it is, I just forgot about it,"

"Wow!"said Ray, "That's so cool"

"Yeah,"said John.

Chapter 3

The two boys were sitting watching the television ....... to be continued!!

Magic box self evaluation

I enjoyed reading my story and I think the strongest part is when the two boys find the box.

These words describe my story, well written, fast-moving, and a wee bit funny.It is well written because it is easy to follow, It goes quickly and it is a wee bit funny when John gets the gasmask stuck on his head.

The best bit of my story is when they are in the attic because it is funny.

I am pleased with the beginning because it describes what the boys look like and what they did.

I would have to say my story is quite easy to follow.