King Bouncer!

 

Hayley was a little girl who lived with her mum in the country. Her mum bought her a rabbit just before easter.Hayley didn't kno what to call her new rabbit.Her mum suggested Bouncer. Hayley thought it was perfect.She wrote bouncer at the top of his cage.Soon it became the night before easter. Hayley was always interested in learning new things. So she asked her mum "Mummy who is the easter bunny?".

Her mum said "I don't know dear. But he is very special and will only an easter egg if you go straight to sleep!" So off hayley ran up to her bedroom and she jumped straight into her bed and went to sleep.Later on Hayley realized that she hadn't say good night to bouncer. So she creeped past her mums room and ran out to the garden. Bouncer was looking out his cage at hayley. "Oh bouncer I forgot to say good night, sorry. Do you know who the easter bunny is, I really want to know!" He didn't answer back so she walked towards her back door. She turned back round to bouncer ."Are you the easter bunny?" He winked with his tiny little eye.Hayley was so excited she ran back into her house to tell her mum but she thought she better to take bouncer too.She walked back out to get him but to her surprise there was a big white rabbit standing smiling at her. "Are you the easter bunny?" she asked him. "Yeah and your bunny too!" He said.

"Is it you bouncer?" Hayley said.

"Yes I certainly am. I am away to easter land to check up on those little bunnies of mine. They work for me and make the eggs for you!"Bouncer said

"Oh bouncer. Can I come and I will be a good girl because mummy said naughty girls don't get easter eggs!"Hayley asked her rabbit.

"Yeah but remember be a good girl." Bouncer took her hand and off they walked to easter land.

 

When they got there Hayley could see loads of rabbits just like bouncer. All white and fluffy with pink pads on there paws.When she walked over the grass with bouncer to get to the egg making factory, she seen little yellow chicks running by. They were making noises and saying "Easter is coming , oh hello king bouncer!"

"Hello there little ones!"He said back

"King, wheres the king?" Hayley asked bouncer

"I am the king of easter land !" bouncer said.Hayley walked on feeling really suprised.They finally reached the factory.It was gold and shiny."Go on open the doors and see whats inside!"He said. She opened the door and seen loads of big chocolate eggs getting wrapped in paper that were pink, orange , green , blue , lilac and every other colour you can think of. Bouncer walked over to a little one of his helpers and whispered something in his ear. The little helper ran off to get something. Shortly after he came back with a big pink shiny parcel with a white sparkly bow. Bouncer said "Its your easter egg but only open it on easter day, time you got back home now, on the count of three you will be home..1....2....3!"

 

Hayley woke up lying on her bed all wrapped up. She wondered if it was a dream. She looked around there was the easter egg!She ran out to see bouncer because she wasn't fully sure. It could have been the egg her mum gave her. She said to bouncer "Was it real?". Bouncer winked to her. She up to her room and opened her easter egg. Inside written on the choclate with icing was her name and a little message saying 'May your easter wishes come true' and in even smaller writing under that it said 'again'

 

 

 

Angela

 

Continued from a start...

 

The teachers stopped us to do a count check .

"23,24,25...there's one missing!" uttered the teacher.

Another replied "Ehmm....It's ANGELA! She was mucking about at the back of the line with a few others.Children, can I have your attention? Thank you, did anyone see where Angela ran to?" All the pupils shook there heads.

"Angela , you can come out now, the joke is over ! " shouted the teacher. Then came a long silence. Everyone looked around but not one footstep was heard. I looked around too but I thought she was playing anoyher one of her silly pranks. The teachers told us to go back to our dorms.

 

1 week past and still we sat in our dorms. Me and the other girls were chatting. They said that she was spoiling it for the rest of us with her pranks. They also said when she comes back that she wasn't staying in our dorm anymore, that's when I interrupted. "That's not very fair . And anyway I don't think it's a prank anymore. You know yourself she can't help but laugh when she does her pranks so why wasn't she laughing then?"

One of the girls remarked " That's true , she always kills her self by laughter. Maybe she's been kidnapped or she could be lying somewhere hurt or..."

Then we all went silent." Now, now, we have to think of the better of things like .. "

Suddenly Daniel walked in " Come with me , Lisa , I have to  show you something..."

 

"Eww...get out , you have boy germs! " the girls moaned.

"Its ok, he's just going." I laughed

 

Daniel grabbed my arm and pulled me to the hotel's lounge. In the lounge sitted, four police men , three pharamedics , six teachers and Angela's parents.

" Dunno, all I know is she hasn't been found and they are going to search in the next twenty-four hours, after that they are calling it off and after that they are saying she's dead!" Daniel told me.

"We need to go find her, or it'll be too late!" I shouted. Everybody  in the lounge heard me , the teachers came out and we got a row. The head teacher said " Right! You two are in serious trouble. That was a private confidential conversation. Angela could be badly hurt and all you  two want to do is delay time. Now stop dilly-dallying and goto your dorms.If you two come out again , you won't get to go to any more trips in your life !"

"Well, I don't really want to go to another trip, if everytime we go  one of my best friends go missing!" I explained. She went quiet, we all did.

"Ok just go back to your dorms." She walked back into the lounge.

"Lisa." Daniel said

"Yeah?" I replied

"About what you said, want to go now?" he asked

"What are you...Oh! Yeah lets go!" We sneaked out to find angela.If they weren't going to fing her we would.On the walk we walked from the hotel to the beach back to the hotel so we walked the tracks. I started to run to find her. Screaming and shouting her name. I started to go faster and my adrenalin pumping minute by minute. I think I got so worried incase I  found her dead. I started to run faster, I saw her , I did!! Her long black hair, her mischevious smilebut suddenly I fell in a heap."Lisa, Lisa , what is it?" Daniel said as he ran towards me.

"It's Angela, she's standing over there." I gasped He looked but noone was there.

"Let's go back to your dorm!" He explained to me.

"No please I want to find her!" I begged.

"Ok, hurry up then !" he cried

 

We arrived at the beach . We were standing on the  edge so we tried to find a way to get on to the sand. After 10 minutes , we found a flight of stairs. Slowly holding hands we walked down. We were shaking with fear of what we might find. Earlier that week there had beena  sea storm. So the question was, was she going to be ok ? We stepped onto the sand. There was a few caves. Suddenly a girl walked out the cave, was it Angela?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Chapter 1 of The Magic Box

 

 

 

Why did I have to take it?

Why did I have to hate?

And why did it come back for me?

 

50 years earlier......

 

It was 1956 and in Scotland , a boy called David wandered the streets. This is normal, very normal as David was adventerous. It was December and his feet squealched in the snow , the frost fell on his nose and when he breathed the frost tingled his throat. David had caught a cold the night before. As he walked down Gaber street he noticed a lane. Why had he never noticed it before? Maybe he had never paid enough attention? ATCHOOO! His cold kept on bugging him. As he walked to the lane he wiped his nose on his jackets sleeve. He slowly crossed the road feeling anxious incase there was a group of bullies, David was often bullied as he had rather large ears. He would get called Dumbo, jug ears, elephant and anything related to it. He began to get closer and closer and ......BEEP! A car almost hit him! That put his adrenalin right up and made his heart pump faster than ever. When he was close he saw something, it was a shop, the shop was old and it had a banner made of oak wood and it have carved in it "Antiques". He took a step in the lane towards the shop but he got too scared and worried , he backed off and ran all the way home . He didn't slip on the ice or anything. He ran into his house and slammed the door shut and put his back against it as if a demon was coming to get him. "David do not slam the door like that, you know better!"

shouted david's mum. She was quite depressed as her husband worked in the navy and he was the captain, she never got to see him. David got the disadvantage as well as he couldn't play football with his dad in the garden or talk about his problems and it didn't help him having a really crabby mum. "" OOOO...kkkk huhuh Sorr..yyy!" David gasped as he was out of breath after running a mile and a half home.

"David why are you so out of breath?" asked mum curiously.

"I was...eh..... dancing mum, yeah i was dancing !" he replied. That was the first time he had ever lied to his mum.

" Ok but don't run in like that it scares me"she said caringly.

 

That night David could not sleep he had too much on his mind. It was snowing more than ever, the snow was at least 10 inches thick. He thought about the shop and the lane. They were so suprising as he had never noticed it. He didn't know what he should do, should he go and investigate the shop or should he try and forget about it? He was too confused he needed time.

 

By the morning he had decided, he was going to go and investigate so after he had his breakfast, he sneaked out the door. He ran back to Gaber street and looked down every lane. When he was half way down Gaber street he saw the antique shop. He walked towards the shop with fear but kept on going. When he got to the shop he grabbed the gold plated handle turned it 'CLICK', it swung open. Inside was a dusty room full of antiques like picture of old cars. There was an old man at the till near the far end. He had a green cloak that looked like it had just been pulled out a garbage bin. "Oh ! Are you lost boy?" said the man.

"No sir, I was just passing by yesterday when .." David replied

"Oh you'll want to see my invention , wait there I'll go and get it." The man wandered through the door next to the counter. David had a look about and noticed records so he slowly walked over to them. He knelt down on the oak wood floor, it creaked. He pulled out the cardboard box with the records in it. The box was from Ireland. As he raked through the records of Elvis and Ratpack. He pulled the box further out to see the rest of them but it got caught on something. He out his under the coffee table to get the records out.He felt something hard with carvings in it. He pulled it out but the records were in the way, he shoved them on the dusty floor. It was a box , it had Ireland carved on the front of it and two clovers also carved with a knife. "Ahh here it is !" It was the old man. David wanted the box, he had to distract him.

"Excuse me can you tell me how you made the invention, in fact go and get the bit of paper for me , that you keep your notes on," so off the man went thinking he was very interested but David couldn't care less and that was the second time he had lied in that week. He quickly grabbed the box and ran out the shop. He ran down the lane back to Gaber street. He knew he was now safe to have the box all to himself. At the same time the old man came back thruogh to the shop. " Ok here it is my .. " he just realised David was gone. He shoke his head but suddenly realised the records were out. He thought to himself "He's in Paddy's hands now , god bless him." What was he talking about?

 

When David got home he ran up his stairs and , obvisously, slammed his door. " Aaah now box what will we do?" David said. He noticed there was a lock on it. He tried to fidget it open. He got too frustrated and kicked the box off his bed. He fell asleep but what he didn't know was when he kicked the box off the bed, he unleashed your worst nightmare....

 

 

 

 

Chapter 2 of the Magic Box

As David woke up he rubbed the crusty sleep from his hazel eyes. He rolled over to where the open box lay." I opened it.." David mumbled to himself. He thought, I better go and pick it up before mum comes in. He jumped off his bed and picked up the box. When he turned around to put the box under his bed , there was a little man on his bed. " Aaah ! who are you and what are you?" David shrieked.

"Ohh my lad I am not that scary am I? Any way I am Paddy McGuck and if you don't mind my boy I am a leprachaun!" .............. to be continued!!

 

 

 

 

My self evaluation for the Magic Box !

 

I will now tell you what I thought about my story rather than you telling me!

 

When I read it I imagined I was a geovisiter so heres what I thought!

 

DID YOU ENJOY READING THE STORY ?

 

~ I quite enjoyed reading my story but I wish I'd wrote more to read.

 

WHICH PART DO YOU THINK ARE PARTICULARY STRONG?

 

~ I think the part of my story which is the strongest is when he crossed the road as it is full of feeling.

 

WHICH WORDS APPLY TO YOUR STORY AND SAY WHY?

 

~ THRILLING & MYSTERIOUS ~

 

THRILLING ~ Because I put alot of strong feelings that make you excited

MYSTERIOUS ~ Because there was one part when he noticed a shop which just appeared right there and then .....

 

 

WHICH PART OF YOUR STORY DO YOU THINK IS BEST AND WHY?

 

I think the beginning because I was the only one to start with questions from my class.It is also an unusual way to start.

 

ARE YOU PLEASED WITH YOUR BEGINNING AND WHY?

 

As I said I am very pleased , it is the best part of my story in my opinion. I think this because I took time thinking until I got it perfect.

 

IS THE STORY LINE EASY TO FOLLOW OR IS IT COMPLICATED?

 

I think its pretty simple but not to simple as I wouldn't reccommend it to a little one. I did have a couple of spelling mistakes but I have tried to fix them.

 

That is my view on my story, if you would like to say anything about my story click on discussion at the top of the page.

 

 

 

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