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                                                                                          Ps2 dilemma By Ryan,Nathan and Jamie

 

 

 

 

 

narrator: There are three brothers Bobby, Jimmy and James. They are all fighting over the playstation 2.

 

Jimmy: I wanna play!!

Bobby:but youve been on ALL day.

Jimmy:neh-et

Bobby:but its mine

James:stop arguing!!

Narrator:bobby and jimmy are arguing

Bobby and Jimmy  both turning round in surprise

James:Finnaly! you've stopped!(Phew)

Jimmy:I'm still going on.

Bobby:No you're not.

James:(ugh..for peeps sake)Shut up!

Narrator:Bobby and Jimmy are to busy arguing so James goes on the PS2.Bobby snatches the controller.

James:whit ye da--in!moron.

Bobby:You're the moron.

Narrator:James pushes Bobby

Bobby pushes James into the t.v and the PS2 breaks so they both get grounded.

 

 

 The bad Bunny 

the bad bunny Joseph is always causing mischeif in the cosy little  town of elderburry as he is always theiving the easter eggs before they can be presented  to the children. there is a large problem every year and the other kids are sick and tired of the evil bunny theiving them.

           "can you please fsad it your making the kids upset," the kids said.

          "so ive stole them this year and you have no idea where they are hahaha,"said Joseph.

          "we'll find them then," the kids said and wondered off to the cliff.

         they got to the top of the cliff and gareth fell on the floor and they all heard something moving, then they looked over thier shoulers and seen a large door opening for the side of the cliff then they seen a large bag and inside it and seen all the eggs that have been stolen. this turned into the best easter ever!!!!! 

           fred the youngest was all excitedthat he saved the day that they didnt notice that the golden egg was missing. fred searched all around  but couldnt find it. 

"looking for something," said joseph

"give us it now!" said the freinds.

"Ok then ive learnt my lesson now," siad joseph willingly

  the morale of this story is to never steal because youll get caught.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Laughing In The Face Of Death

 

His face shone dark in the moonlight, while his coat lay torn slowly floating in between the reeds. His shirt was dirty and wet. The dark waters that lay behind him gave him the appearance of a demon or a dark shadowy creature moving in the night. His sheath was well padded and worn away because of constant usage, it had three diamonds encrusted in it. It had a gold rim and a thin copper lining wrapped around it. This lay on his back but it never wieghed him down as it was as light as a feather. He had black boots on and they were half-covered by his camouflage trousers.

He walked on at a normal pace when he heard a purring noise, after a while he ignored it and carried on his stroll. He heard it again. He was watching a certain bush knowing that there was a creature behind it because of all the wierd purring noises. the world stayed as still as a stick insect as they lay eyes on eachother there was more rustling then the beast came out, a tiger that was as orange as sunset heading speedily at Kai. In reaction Kai drew his sword from his sheath and took a deep slash at the tiger's leftpaw then stabbed it twice roundabout the same place the tiger had gave in to the pain and there it lay dead......

Kai was wanting to get out of these forbidden woods, but there was no directioning for north There was no stars to guide his path as the tree's branches covered the sky. He stopped to listen as an owl hooted in a certain direction. As he didn't know what way was right he followed the hooting taking him closer to a small village called Kyira(kai-ear-a).

The village was cosy looking and very homing that made Kai wasnt nervous anymore as he recognised this village from long ago. It suddenly memorised his younger life. After a short pause, he moved on. He knocked on the gate lightly as he didnt want to wake people up but there was no answer. He ws getting quite impatient so he flexed and then leaped right over it clearing it by a clear metre or so. he landed without a sound like afeather dropping onto a pillow and walked on stoting to the eye catching fortress where 2 lights lay on. after 2 minuites or so he arrived at his destinationand knocked on the lage wooden door and this time it was answered almost straight away

" yes, what do you acquire brave fighter" said the young guard sleepily. It was visible as the legends of him had described him in very great detail. One of the myths of him was a tall shadowy figurinethat swooped me from the demons grasp

" I would desire a place to sleep if you may."

"No bother I will ask the king if there is a room free for you. Replied the guard " 2 minuites. If you want to come in you are more than welcome."

He fealt welcome and therefore he went straight in and up to the bedroom and rested on his bed. After a while he dosed off into a very deep sleep retaining his muscle energy giving him enough power for the morning,.

He woke at the break of dawn, with his face sweating and his body quivering as he had had the most terrible

nightmare of his life. He sat directly up straight for a couple of minutes taking a deep breath one after the other then he slowly lay back drifting slowly into another sleep.

      At the start of noon he woke up and got ready for the day in front of him. He was tired and weary as his sleep was broken. It has became occasional for him now as he started to wonder about his past and present. He got dressed and stoteed out to the village. at his suspicion therewas many peole in a crowd waiting for his presense. he went out and heard them shouting in a rage and the girls at the back gossiping about his looks as usual....

       "QUIET!!!!!!!!!!" yelled the king and then they all sotpped chattering and gave attention to the front. There was mumbling at the back yet after a while it quietened down and then stopped. There is many stories about this hero as you all know very well. Yet do not harass him as if you do you will spend 48 hours in the prison. There will be no need for loyers or any such as I have warned you about it already.

There was mumbling that quietened but drifted on for a reasonable while unlike the last one yet then it gradually stopped. Kai walked into the blacksmiths demanding on his sword bieng sharpened and cleaned he palced it into the blacksmiths hands and then waked away.

 

 

CHAPTER 2...... MYSTICS

 

 

He came out ogf the shop and went back to the castle. Unusually this time there was no people crowding round him. There was only a couple of reasidents giving him the odd look every now and again.

He went to the castle and up to his bedroom. he cleaned himself thourilly and went back out to the village.there was tons of people waiting outside (again) shouting as if they were an angry mob wanting to kill him but instead they were cheerenig. it was hard to make out but he could hear sword and as soon as he made it out the king,tall skinny and had a ruby red cloack in his hands that matched the kings torso. he was wearing deep black trousers and a rusty looking brown belt.  

"These are what you aqquire, I'm sure," glared the king in a bommingly deep voice.

"What a red cloack?" Kai answered in a very questionative way.

"Head to the sacred tower and retrieve what you want. I have to warn you though, it wont be easy!" laughed the king in a strange sort of way.

He looked at the tower and gulped as he seen it.  It was covered by a large black cloud as it towered to the sky in an evil way. The dark grey tower looked as if it was real itself. 

 

The magic box

 

 

9 years ago in a haunted house as frightening as death itself , there was a door made of thick wood and covered in cobwebs, giving it the appearance of a white blanket. Behind the door there was a deep secret as deep as the ocean still to be recovered.The secret is still to be recovered - and one day it will.

"Kyle hurry up with them bags will you because you're taking ages!" shouted kyles mum from the kitchen.

" umm ,ahh ,,,, OK mum,"said kyle anxiuosly, as kyle was in the back seat listening to System of a Down on his new 1 gigabite MP3 player lazing and slacking about as usual. All of a sudden he got up to his feet as quickly as possible ( which was pretty quick as he was a black belt in jujitsu) so then he went into the car boot of the black vauxhall vectra and got the plastic bags out of it. He stoted slowly into the house, layed the bag on the table and then climbed his way into his bedroom which was a tip as usual . When he got into his room he rested on his bed and read his book.

He was reading the 4th book of the green mile and was near the end of it.

He was lying in his bed when he heard a noise at his window - a sort of mumbling so he looked out of the window and in the next garden there was jack calling on him. He opened his window and listened to him.

"Are you coming to the park?"asked Jack.

"Ok," replied Kyle, "I'll be 15 mins."

After a while they were at the park and they were having a ball there. They were on the swing when they saw a house, a house that was grey covered by a huge black cloud which lokoked like there was a large tornado around it . The look on klyes face looked like he had just been slapped very hard while Jacks face wasin an amazed gesture as if he had just been to his first rock concert.

"Wow lets go into it,"said Jack enthusiastically

"Umm, are you sure about this because all your other ideas have ended in a disaster!" commented jack sarcastically.

"Whatever, I dont care, you've never been adventurous," retorted jack as snappy as a cat

 

 

chapter 2

the adventure

 

Meteors came crashing down and icebergs came crashing at the back of it melting the drops of fire but then it all vanished and they woke up in a black rooms if it was the 3rd dimension . They were just waking up and out of the corner of jack's eye he saw a dark shadowy figurine passing about the room as fast as a cheetah. Jack nudged kyle to wake him up.

"Did you see that!?"enthused Jack.

"yeh,yeh I,m up already, what is it?"replied kyle in a muttering voice.

"Didn't you see that!?" jack repeated.

"No I didn't see that," answered kyle unenthusiastically as he was just waking up .... to be continued

 

 

self evaluation

 

 

I evaluated my story and I thought that it was gripping and mysterious as it caught your eye at The start of chapter 2

I found it mysteriuos as you (the reader) cant catch whats going on.

 

the best part is the start of chapter 1 as it wants you to read more. I am pleased with the beginning as it tells you the past of the magic box found it easy to follow. I also liked the start of chapter 2 as it fealt quite strong. So overall I enjoyed. Please leave a comment if you think different of my story