One day on april the 8th the little girl was called Anna and she always wanted a bunny for easter because all her friends had a rabbit.That night before easter she went through the livingroom and said " please can i have a bunny ."

 Well who is going to clean it and go out and play with it with it because me and your dad cant we will be at work all day and you will be at the after school club ,said mum then she   

 Well who is going to clean it and go out and play with it with it because me and your dad cant we will be at work all day and you will be at the after school club ,said mum then she  .So she went to her bed and fell asleep  dreaming about bunnys .It was easter when she woke up and ran through to  mum and dads room and there was no bunny.She felt very very sad but she got easter eggs but her mum realies she realy want that bunny so her mum said ok then you can have a bunny.So she had her breakfast and got changed and got in the car.Mum mum i cant belive it i am getting bunny sssssssssshhhhhhhhhh i know you are getting a bunny so tell me what coulour of bunny do you want ??? well i dont really know yet because i have not seen them.So they came out of the car then they went in to the petshop and seen all of the bunnys .She went wow wee look at all of them mumma there is to much to choose from mum i like that one over there eating a carrot i would like that one please mum just get me it ok then darling i will  let you get it only if you look after it ok  YES MOTHER I WILL  thank you .I will go and get the lady to go in and get you it  .So she went to get it so i was really exited. So they got out of the car and tain the bunny in the car in a little cage all of annas friends said whats thtat in ur little box anna said a little baby rabbit they all said aawwww  thats so cuite.They went in the house and then let the bunny out of the box it was running all around the house Anna invited chloe in the house and then they tain it up the stairs they got home at 7 30 at night Chloe had to go in at 8 30 but my mum offerd Chloe to stay with Anna tonight so Chloe phoned her mum and said ac n i stay with Anna tonight well if you want yes ok i will.Her mum said i will bring your clothes around by the way mum Anna got a bunny today she said aww is it cute .they tain the rabbit up the stairs and then the tain it on Annas bed they where so exited.It fell asleep for a wee while  because it was coming on 9 00 at night so me and Chloe fell asleep it was going to be easter tommorrow i will have to get an easter egg for you Chloe.I said do u think the bunny will lay a golden  egg Anna said no .We woke up the next morning and there was a golden egg lying next to the buuny Anna woke up and she Woke up Chloe. Chloe was very excited chloe had went down the stairs and she looked in the livingroom and then she saw loads of easter eggs i was so excited untill my mum gets up. There was loads and loads of eggs .Anna and Chloe where wondering what was in the bunnys golden egg  they said well i think it could be chocolate in the golden egg.ive got a name for it now bouncer awwww thats a lovely name Anna said i wonder what is in the egg well Anna "i really think it is

chocolate ".One of the goldaen eggs started to open up and a little one started to bring

                                        the magic box

One day on a Sunday morning it was dull, cold and it was raining. It was chrismas in two weeks and every one in the city in Glasgow

went shopping for chrismas. Every one was rushing . Two boys were walking around the shops trying to find some pencils for his friends,they were called Shane and Justin . By then every one was away and Shane and Justin were looking for a box to put all the pencils in . Suddenly they found a box shop. They went in and Shane looked around for boxes and at the side of his eye he saw a sparkel out of a box and he wanted to go and open it he shouted "NO NO NO ,please I want to open it " "ok " "thank you ". Shane

"OK " replied Shane.

"Thank you,"Shane said

Shane opened the box but nothing was there . The lady said "Are you finished having a good look?"

"Yes almost!" Justin told her. Justin looked at Shane. He was acting very weird and quiet. "well shane whats in it." "nothing" replied Shane. He got any box what he saw first and went to pay for it and went out and ran away. Justin was running after him shuting "wait wait". shane disappeared. justin could not find him and 2 hours later justin had enufe of looking for him and went to his house. Nock nock ". hello is any one in" His mum opened the door and said "hello justin do you know what is wrong with shane because he came in and he never said hello to me and its not like him can you tell me whats happened "."well we were out getting pencils but we needed a box to put them in. After that he saw some thing and a lady was going to get it then he shouted "no no no please I want to have a good look in side it and he opened it and he keeped on staring at it and the woman said "yes thanks " and he got the box he saw first and went to pay

for it ..........to be continued

The magic box-self-evaluation

yes I thought it was ok.

I thought that my chapter 1 was ok and i thought my best bits where when they saw the box.

I thought my story was boring but it was easy to read because I did full stops,capital letters and not that many spelling mistakes.

I thought the part i like was when shane saw a sparkle and after that he was acting weird.

I am please with my story because i told you where it was and when.

i think my story is simple to follow.

                                                                                   Jessica and Lucy

Narrator:Jessica and Lucy sit next to eachother in class .They both have the same pencil .Tthe always get muddled up with there pencil .So they need to  think of a solution .

Jessica;"We need to think up a solution ".

Lucy;"yeh becouse i think your stealing my pencil."

Jessica;"what can we do to solve the problem ."

Lucy;"We could always put a bit of sticky paper with our name on it ."

Jessica;"yeah lets do that and not fall out over our pencils".

Lucy;"Friends"

Jessica;"teh".

Narrator;Jessica and lucy sat back down .Put sticy paper on the pencils .Then got back to work.